Friday, October 9, 2009

Narrative: Final Paper

My name is Ashley, I am 18 years old and this is when it all started. I had my big 18th birthday party. That’s when I became an adult into this real world. It’s so much different then I thought it would be. I didn’t expect it to happen the way it did, so fast. I was having dinner with my sister at a Mexican food restaurant. That’s when I met this guy and his name tag said Victor. I was really interested in him because the way he was with us. His personality so outgoing and so sincere. I couldn’t pass up a perfect opportunity to get to know such a nice guy. This is when the real story starts, when my new life begins.

So this thing i call "The begging of my new life," goes a little something like this. I met the most amazing person in my life, Victor. Yes the guy from the restaurant. He contacted me a little after i ate dinner with my sister at the restaurant. We hung out, saw a movie a couple times. We connected very fast and really well. We decided to take our relationship to the next level, dating. Everything was so great.

So we have been dating for a while now, everything was going so good. I guess Victor thought i was the right one for him, becasue he was ready to take the next step. It all happened so fast. It was saturday night and he had asked me out to dinner, so i got all dressed up. When we arrived at the restaurant we were seated and given are menus. All that good stuff. So as the lady was bringging our food out Victor looked at me and said "I Love You Ashley". He looked so happy. As soon as she sat the food in front of my face i knew what he was so happy about. There was a ring placed in a tomato cut like a rose, as i pulled it out he said " will you marry me Ashley?"

I am so happy right now, dont know what to think, say or do. I am speechless. But just then the words came out, YES! yes i will marry you. We were both so happy. I was so excited i told everybody my family my friends. I was most excited becasue of the most beautiful ring i have on my finger and the most handsome, nicest man as my fiance. A few months passed and we decided to move in together at Victor's, just untill we could afforod are own place.

So i finally had all my stuff moved in. The room looked good. It had just been a week or so sense i had moved in, victor started feeling really sick. We went to the doctors to get a check up to see if he was ok they did a check up and they did some blood work. We went home waitng for the results, but the next day we just couldnt wait. He felt so bad we had to take him back to the doctors. That's when the doctor had told us what was going on, he was diagnosed with End Stage Kidney Disease. It was one of the most hardest things to hear ever. I was so affraid, he was affraid. Luckliy there is a treatment, there is transplant and dialysis. Dialysis is a thing machine cleans his blood cause the kidneys dont anymore. We go to diaysis 3 days a week for 4 hours, Untill he can qualify for a transplant.

This is a big bump in the road for both of us. Very hard and emotional. We have been through alot together. We are still happy with our lifes and our life together. We have got used to most of it, big bills, doctor appiontments, and food changes. I know me and Victor are ment to be, this brought us closer together and we will get closer and closer. We have a long life together and many more things to happen, are wedding still to come. But we will always be happy in love with each other, and nothing will get in the way,or stop us.

1 comment:

Stephanie CSU said...

I really enjoy the story your narrative unfolds. I enjoy the last line of your intro paragraph "this is when the real story starts, when my new life begins." This draws in the reader making them interested on how it changes. May I suggest that next time you give a hint as to how "the real story begins". Your Intro paragraph would connect much better with the rest of you narrative if you added something like... Life is full of unexpected hardships, and unforeseen challenges. This statement sets the reader up to be ready to not only see how you and victor fell in love, but also the trials you had to go through. Great work! I wish you well.